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Trying To Improve An Outbound Email Letter

Labeled as advice in Domain Buying and Selling Discussion started by blue crystal, Nov 5, 2019 at 7:36 PM.

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  1. blue crystal

    blue crystal Upgraded Member Blue Account

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    I am modifying a previous outbound email letter by inserting the colored sentence below which replaces a former sentence. I find this replacement great but since I am not an English native speaker, I would like to know your opinion about it and what changes should I make if this is not proper English. I am particularly in doubt if the expression "top administrators" is adequate. However, any suggestions for improving also other parts of this letter model will be appreciated.



    Hello,
    I am John Taylor, owner of the domain name: SomeDomain.com.
    I am contacting you and the top administrators of other companies for which this domain name is highly valuable and can make a big impact on their business or activities.
    Should your organization have an interest in acquiring this domain, please feel free to contact me.
    ************************
    You can contact me through:
    Email: [email protected]
    or
    Tel: 00-00000000

    My best regards,
    John
     
    Last edited: Nov 5, 2019 at 7:49 PM
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  2. blue crystal

    blue crystal Upgraded Member Blue Account

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    If the letter's text is perfect let me know as well...
     

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