Could this be a Good Custom landing page ?

[TheJNR2024]

I made a custom landing page for my domain name Nctrans.com. Transportation and logistics domain with history of the domain and benefits. I wanted to get everyone’s feedback on this custom landing page if possible thanks in advanced

 

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First and foremost make the text at the top of your page black, its invisible to the reader and I think the lander is too long and looks like you're trying too hard to sell it. A domain like this is going to be a hard sell, might not sell at all in fact. I would chop the page down about 90% and make it super simple. Open the website on a standard laptop and you will see how small the scrollbar is compared to the entire page. A good rule of thumb I like to follow is to never let the scrollbar appear at all - keep it short and sweet

 

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Update - the text is fine at the top actually, the pictures just took forever to load.

 

[TheJNR2024]

made some minor adjustments to the page to make it shorter. still working on tweaking text pictures/ to keep it short and simple. I appreciate your feedback thanks,

 

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It's impressive work in terms of web design, almost too good, as it looks like a real site rather than an obvious 'for sale' landing page. Imho.
The text in the second screen shows up blurry.
Good luck!

 

[TheJNR2024]

It's impressive work in terms of web design, almost too good, as it looks like a real site rather than an obvious 'for sale' landing page. Imho.
The text in the second screen shows up blurry.
Good luck!

 

[TheJNR2024]

Thanks I just wanted to try to make something different other than those generic landing pages. Hope this isn’t going to hurt me In the long run like I’m selling a company it’s just the domain. I wanted to show it’s value and potential but will see

 

[TheJNR2024]

update : Sold