advice Last sentence in email to end user?

[Igor Mironyuk]

Which last sentence must be in email to end user?

Do you interested in this domain?
Do you want to buy this domain?

or WHAT?

Which is better(I mean not only my written above)?

 

[Domains - Wanted]

This is your chance to get this attractive domain before one of your competitors does. I'm looking forward to hearing from you. Does this sound better or?

Sure does

In fact, I'd add a preceeding paragraph: Terms of sale are first come, first serve...

 

[Lars Ravn]

 

[DrJacoby]

Two things:

1. The dollar sign goes before the numbers (e.g. $9,995).
2. What a ridiculous price for that domain.

 

[Lars Ravn]

Two things:

1. The dollar sign goes before the numbers (e.g. $9,995).
2. What a ridiculous price for that domain.

Thanks for the feedback, it is just a test email.

 

[Igor Mironyuk]

you can track the mails under sent

I can't do it: I click in this addon Sale and next I need enter new deal but return to menu of add-on I can't.

 

[Lars Ravn]

Sure does

In fact, I'd add a preceeding paragraph: Terms of sale are first come, first serve...

What do you say for this email?

 

[TestCase]

What do you say for this email?

Others may disagree, but here's my 2 cents.

I'd take out "Be a winner" at the top of your email. (Are you implying they are losers if they don't by your domains???) If you insist upon including anything, leave it at, "Act now before your competitors do!"

Your opening line, "This is your chance...", Needs to be shorter. I'll let others make suggestions for appropriate wording.

Next, I'm guessing English is not your native tongue, so I'd recommend you change each instance of "ebetting.eu & egaming.eu is" to "ebetting.eu & egaming.eu are". (Use "is" for singular and "are" for plural.)

I'd also avoid asking the question, "What can you use ebetting.eu & egaming.eu for?" Don't make the target of your sales pitch try to figure out why the domain(s) are/may be of value, TELL THEM how/why your domain(s) is/are the best solution to their need/problem (which they may or may not know exists).

I'd also be consistent with how you present your domains. In your graphic you use "eBetting.eu & eGaming.eu" but in the body of sales pitch you present your domains in all lower case letters, "ebetting.eu & egaming.eu". I prefer the way you did it in your graphic.

I always use appropriate capitalization in pitching domains as I feel it helps make the domain stand out by creating a more visually appealing and memorable representation instead of simply seeing it as some words or characters strung together.

Also, I'd suggest that you be a little more positive/aggressive in the way you describe your domains. Instead of saying "ebetting.eu & egaming.eu are 2 good domains...", I'd go with "ebetting.eu & egaming.eu are 2 great domains that can...". Or maybe, "ebetting.eu & egaming.eu are the perfect domains for..."

As to the WHOLE last portion of your sales pitch dealing with buying your domains, it's too long and convoluted. It needs to be simplified with a stronger call to action.

One last thought, I'm not a big fan of this type of "flashy" sales pitch, though I'm sure it works for some. I much prefer a short, concise all text (or mostly) email that is subdued and to the point.

Good luck!

 

[wormfood]

If I don't hear from you, I will take it to mean you have fainted from the stunning quality of this domain name and its outrageously low price.

 

[Igor Mironyuk]

On Saturday I sent some emails "short" and Sunday - 1 email "detailed"

"Short":
Hello.
I am selling domain names SouthernUkraine.com, Nikolaev.co,
Kherson.today, NikolaevPhotos.com. Would you be interested in
acquiring them?

"Detailed":
Hello.

I live in Ukraine and write you for the following:
Ukraine geographically locates between Asia and Europe and connects them. In Ukraine the most fertile lands in the world especially in southern regions of Ukraine. That's why I am selling my domain SouthernUkraine.com for $3000. Ukrainian fertile lands determine the value of the domain.

You can quickly purchase this domain by following this link and click Buy now near this domain:

https://sedo.com/search/?member=5c1d5f678d21c9912e8520d993da87bdeb1a78b9

Get it now while somebody else not purchased this domain!

And "Short" and "Detailed" emails I sent to companies who works with Ukraine. I am owner of the domain SouthernUkraine.com and some other GEO ukrainian domains. "Detailed" emails I sent to agriculture company who work with Ukraine.

On the now no responses.

What I wrote wrong?

 

[Soofi]

I sent 2 emails today. One had 5 views and no response, and another had 34 views and a phone call with a decision maker...

Hopefully they seal the deal tomorrow.

All I can say is that what I do works for me on a regular basis, and I hope that what everyone else is doing works for them.

Cheers.

Would love to see your email draft. Thanks

 

[MarkMetric]

I've sold a domain at 22500 Euro after I refused the buyers initial offer of 7000 Euro on a auction platform.
Below is the mail I've sent six months later after the deal fell apart,
"
Hi ______
Just dropped a mail to let you know that __________ is still up for grabs. If your are interested we can do a direct selling thru Escrow. The price should work out as there would be no brokerage fee. I would prefer selling directly than auctions / websites with high brokerage fee.

Let me know if you would be interested. "

Got a reply, kept negotiating and closed the deal 8 months later.

 

[Kate]

I think you will struggle to sell these names, the problem isn't even the sales pitch. Even the best sales pitch cannot sell domains nobody wants.

 

[TOP gTLD]

BUY IT...or else...

Fab one! How on earth I never thought of it myself

 

[Joe N]

On Saturday I sent some emails "short" and Sunday - 1 email "detailed"

"Short":
Hello.
I am selling domain names SouthernUkraine.com, Nikolaev.co,
Kherson.today, NikolaevPhotos.com. Would you be interested in
acquiring them?

"Detailed":
Hello.

I live in Ukraine and write you for the following:
Ukraine geographically locates between Asia and Europe and connects them. In Ukraine the most fertile lands in the world especially in southern regions of Ukraine. That's why I am selling my domain SouthernUkraine.com for $3000. Ukrainian fertile lands determine the value of the domain.

You can quickly purchase this domain by following this link and click Buy now near this domain:

https://sedo.com/search/?member=5c1d5f678d21c9912e8520d993da87bdeb1a78b9

Get it now while somebody else not purchased this domain!

And "Short" and "Detailed" emails I sent to companies who works with Ukraine. I am owner of the domain SouthernUkraine.com and some other GEO ukrainian domains. "Detailed" emails I sent to agriculture company who work with Ukraine.

On the now no responses.

What I wrote wrong?

I would not use the detailed template. Fertile lands have nothing to do with domain value, and I don't think any buyers are going to be tricked into thinking otherwise.

Can you give us some examples of the buyers you're approaching who would be interested in all these names?

 

[Corey]

Last sentence...

Thank you for considering purchasing domain.name. We look forward to doing business with you!

 

[RGkiiing]

And that's why most people in the world are garbage at sales.

Do you REALLY know what a call to action is? Most people don't.

HERE
Nail your Cold Email Call To Action: 10 Techniques to Boost your Response Rates

Domaining is full of lazy shortcut takers. You do what makes you happy, but this industry is also full of people that are killing it because they take the time to learn every nuance of marketing and sales.

Directly from a sales professional:



Simply asking someone if they want the name is a weak sales strategy that forces you to spend more money at the point of acquisition in order to acquire domains that sell themselves.

Millions of domains can't sell themselves, so YOU have to. Or be lazy, whatever makes you happy.

Even in this link one of the strategies says to end with a yes/no question

 

[DomainVP]

Even in this link one of the strategies says to end with a yes/no question

Listen buttercup, if that's what you get from that article then you go ahead and do you.

The article clearly says not to ask yes/no questions directly in relation to buying decisions.

But you would know that if you hadn't sped through the bullet points and then wanted to run back and post a jab at me.

This is why lazy domainers suck at sales.

You lazily read through an article for lazy/poor results.

Merry Christmas.

 

[Wesley S]

haha I have it and you don't, nannynannybooboo.

 

[RGkiiing]

Listen buttercup, if that's what you get from that article then you go ahead and do you.

The article clearly says not to ask yes/no questions directly in relation to buying decisions.

But you would know that if you hadn't sped through the bullet points and then wanted to run back and post a jab at me.

This is why lazy domainers suck at sales.

You lazily read through an article for lazy/poor results.

Merry Christmas.

not sure why youre upset.. you posted a link that lists ending with a question as a call to action

its not "what i got". Its what it says

 

[DomainVP]

its not "what i got". Its what it says

Here is what the "words" say...

"The call to action in the above cold email is a simple confirmation question. It is not trying to sell anything yet. There is no request for a call or a demo. Just a yes/no question that helps you start a conversation with your prospect."

If you recall, OP states the following...

Which last sentence must be in email to end user?

Do you interested in this domain?
Do you want to buy this domain?

or WHAT?

The discussion was based on simply asking someone if they want the name.

So again, this is NOT what to do. Even the article agrees.

You are hyper focusing on the wrong shi*.

I didn't say NEVER ASK A QUESTION EVER, what I said was that you shouldn't end a eMail with a question - instead use a direct call to action and gave a helpful article to give people TEN ideas on how to do that other than ending with a open ended question. Which really works only if you can craft a conversation in the language of your targeted buyer - which OP was struggling to do as well.

not sure why youre upset..

Nobody is "upset". You took the imitative to dig up a thread that ended in October to make a point.

Now I'm making a point: You can speak wisdom to a man. but it's up to the man to open their mind.

You have closed your mind, and I have closed my part of this conversation.

Good day.