Is this okay for a press release?

[Brian123]

Hi, I have never wrote one of these before, so I was wondering if it is okay before I start to submit.
Any comments or ideas are appreciated - thank you.

Workhoo.com – Press Release Jan 2009
A new Internet site has been launched to give every single person a chance to talk about and discuss working issues.

Anyone who works for any company can set up and run their own online forum – providing a valuable platform where employees of a company and managers can interact in a way that has never been possible before.

In a competitive world with the need for businesses to be more streamlined and productive a company can often find itself with a workforce working under pressure resulting in low moral and high staff turnover. The benefits of a company having a highly motivated workforce can be considerable and the two goals of having a workforce that is both motivated and productive should not be regarded as being mutually exclusive to one another.

All too often genuine concerns and good ideas go unnoticed in the workplace because people are afraid to say what they are really thinking about working situations, or management do not have the time to address the issues of those staff on the “shop floor”.

It is important for any company to encourage communication. Company's that make communication between staff and management difficult, or take the view that if staff have a problem they will say something, can often delude themselves into thinking their workforce is content when it is not. It only takes one small problem and one disgruntled employee to feel aggrieved for an entire workforce to develop a destructive ‘them and us’ attitude.

Now, through Workhoo.com staff can post their thoughts on their own dedicated forum for their place of work. This can be done on a daily basis and from the comfort of their own home. Management can read the ideas or concerns of their staff and address them as they see fit.

In today’s uncertain world of economic decline it is important that staff are kept informed about any changes that their company may be going through. Managers may not have the time to answer every single staff question on a daily basis. With the use of Workhoo.com this is more possible.

Managers can monitor the feelings of their staff on a daily or weekly basis – something a simple staff survey will never achieve.

 

[CoolDude55]

its qualified but make it more specific and add extra words on it :hehe:

good release

 

[Brian123]

Okay, here is my final effort - it it okay before I release it?
Thanks in advance.
http://img175.imageshack.us/my.php?image=pressreleasejanpr3.jpg

 

[shahab6]

it's pretty good it will accepted

 

[Brian123]

Thanks for that. Now to find out the best places to release it!

 

[makepurple]

yes, It's good for press release.