@DefinitelyDomains -
I like the upbeat tone of you videos.
My feedback...
What I saw was a (4) phase piece.
1)
Intro - a clear statement that it is a domain you are selling and its name.
2)
Curtain Drop - which outlines a "value proposition" - but one that only domain resellers might see as value.
3)
Call to Action - via a simple bold question - YES!
4)
Contact Info - a passive request for an action "to email you".
I would suggest a few changes that better TARGET your intended prospect.
1)
Intro - good with what you have (tho given the domain name, I would use more of an "AllAboutAutos" classier theme as your domain is "RentASupercar" (more prestigious and less cartoonish).
2)
Curtain Drop - make it about the buyer (not a domainer views) - ask a question more tailored to a high-end car rental vendor - "Is your inventory sitting or being driven?" or even more bold "Do you make money while your cars are parked?" or "Are you making interest payments while your cars sit idle?" Try to hit some kind of nerve with the viewer - stick a knife in it and wiggle it 'til it makes them upset! Touch a nerve, then
solve that problem.
3)
Call to Action - what you had was simple, bold, and to the point - the word "Interested?" is a lead-in to a call to action.
4)
Contact / "The Close" - something that entices them to do something.... other than watch the video 2-3 times... for example "Contact us today to discuss how we can help you drive traffic to your site?" or (and I know I'm old school, but "Call Today! 111-222-1234" Your lead gen rate is 3X if you provide a phone # above your email address. The goal of that initial conversation is to QUALIFY the PROSPECT. It is not to toss out a price.
I think you have something interesting going on with your video approach. I once heard that YouTube is the 2nd largest search engine behind Google's search box. And I think video is a terrific way to poke an emotional response (it is a mini-TV model) an inexpensive advertising venue if you can find a way to harness it.
Thanks again for sharing your video model. I am curious, what software are you using to develop these snippets?
-Cougar
ps: Please don't get me wrong - your initial venture into this is quite interesting - and the initial video pieces your created are quite professional looking - especially the "AllAboutAutos.com" one. That's really got a draw to it - calm, relaxing, (get me out of this damn cubical) type feeling to it. Spot on terrific!