My Music Video

[syntheticrhyme]

I've been trying on an off for the last couple of years to do music full time. I have yet to reach that goal (actually far from it, thank God for the domain business to keep my bills paid). Anyhow, I finally recorded a new song and put up a quick video for it. Any comments are greatly appreciated, thank you all so much.
Here is the video link

[ame="http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pgxK17XI_0g"]My Heart In You - Daniel Bijan - YouTube[/ame]

 

[namenut]

Love the mix, good deep rich range, levels are all good and you know I'm already a fan. I really like your stuff. However ... I don't care for this screen write. I'm a bit lost. A staged pretentious feel.

I would rather see a walk through the village, the park, the past reflecting on places and faces to go along with the story. I want more strength in your face for some reason. I would like to see the look on your face while selecting a cut of meat or tomatoes thinking of her. Trying to contain the raw emotion like screaming with out raising your voice.

Remember "I'm coming Home"? Dude I still tear up watching that video. It takes me with you over a period of time. I can relive my life's similar emotions.

But in the end another beautiful piece friend. Your gonna get recognized. Your talented and I believe you will get there. But then again .... I'm already a fan.

NN

 

[syntheticrhyme]

Love the mix, good deep rich range, levels are all good and you know I'm already a fan. I really like your stuff. However ... I don't care for this screen write. I'm a bit lost. A staged pretentious feel.

I would rather see a walk through the village, the park, the past reflecting on places and faces to go along with the story. I want more strength in your face for some reason. I would like to see the look on your face while selecting a cut of meat or tomatoes thinking of her. Trying to contain the raw emotion like screaming with out raising your voice.

Remember "I'm coming Home"? Dude I still tear up watching that video. It takes me with you over a period of time. I can relive my life's similar emotions.

But in the end another beautiful piece friend. Your gonna get recognized. Your talented and I believe you will get there. But then again .... I'm already a fan.

NN

thanks so much, I really appreciate all of your input. The truth of the matter is i did the video in a few hours that I finally got to myself (I'm usually watching my 3 kids and can't get much done with them around). For the next video I'll definately try to spend more time with a better story line