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I am modifying a previous outbound email letter by inserting the colored sentence below which replaces a former sentence. I find this replacement great but since I am not an English native speaker, I would like to know your opinion about it and what changes should I make if this is not proper English. I am particularly in doubt if the expression "top administrators" is adequate. However, any suggestions for improving also other parts of this letter model will be appreciated.
Hello,
I am John Taylor, owner of the domain name: SomeDomain.com.
I am contacting you and the top administrators of other companies for which this domain name is highly valuable and can make a big impact on their business or activities.
Should your organization have an interest in acquiring this domain, please feel free to contact me.
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You can contact me through:
Email: [email protected]
or
Tel: 00-00000000
My best regards,
John
Hello,
I am John Taylor, owner of the domain name: SomeDomain.com.
I am contacting you and the top administrators of other companies for which this domain name is highly valuable and can make a big impact on their business or activities.
Should your organization have an interest in acquiring this domain, please feel free to contact me.
************************
You can contact me through:
Email: [email protected]
or
Tel: 00-00000000
My best regards,
John
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