Feedback Needed

roadsideruk · 03-02-2005, 10:53 AM

Hi all please look at my site and give me your feedback good or bad i dont mind
www.youpies.co.uk
many thanks

PoorDoggie · 03-02-2005, 12:01 PM

A few tips...
????: NamePros.com http://www.namepros.com/web-design-reviews/72937-feedback-needed.html

I have just read the first paragraph and I am already turning my nose up. You have misplaced punctuation and you keep using possesive speech. Just read through this:
THE ORIGIONAL

Originally Posted by origional

Ever thought of becoming a reporter ?.Do you ever read a report and think that person was not at the same match as me well if the answer is yes i have the solution .All you have to do is e-mail me your match report and i will enter it on my reports page .So after any match all you do is email me here and i will do the rest E-MAIL Click here

TRY SOMETHING LIKE THIS:

Originally Posted by me

Ever thought of becoming a reporter? Do you ever read a report and think, "That person was not at the same match as me!". Well if the answer is yes, we have the solution... All you have to do is e-mail us your match report and we will enter it on the reports page. So... after any match all you do is email your report here and we will do the rest E-MAIL Click here

Now, I am no expert... but I do know a few things...
--> Don't use "my" it makes it too geared towards you... you want to use "us" and "we". That way you make it feel more like a community and not like your personal site. People are more likely to submit their reports if they feel like part of the website.
--> Sort out your punctuation: "Hello .My name is PoorDoggie" is wrong and people do, and will pick up on it.
--> Make it more informal. People who like football don't really like fomal sites. You have made a good shot at it here, but using elipsiss (... as in "So...") and other such tricks will make the site less formal.

Apart from little things like that, the site is ok. The pictures are good and it looks respectable and like something a supporter would like to visit. It looks very friendly as well!

painperdu · 03-02-2005, 02:02 PM

Looks good to me.

I agree with poordoggie about the grammar though.

webgear · 03-03-2005, 04:25 AM

Nice and clean site!I like it!

roadsideruk · 03-04-2005, 11:24 AM

thanks for the feedback
i have tried a background change when rolling over a link what do you all think
many thanks
youpies

PoorDoggie · 03-04-2005, 12:15 PM

nice rollover links!

You still have grammar problems, you always seem to put a space before the full stop or question mark when it should be after it.

EG: You type: "Hello .What is your name ?"
Should Be: "Hello. What is your name?"

You may want to go through and correct these mistakes

kw31 · 03-06-2005, 09:53 AM

Nice banner and use of colour
The white on the banner where the logo sits looks too big though
but neverless it's a great site!

Petter · 03-06-2005, 11:12 AM

It's gray!

.. boring colors IMO, not a very good banner and a boring layout!

sufi · 03-06-2005, 07:51 PM

Boring colors

may be u can substitute it with light green or light blue color. Gray is not looking very good

daddypi · 03-06-2005, 09:54 PM

Clean cut, and professional looking, yet as Sufi said.. it could use a bit "livening up".

03-02-2005, 10:53 AM	THREAD STARTER #1 (permalink)
roadsideruk New Member Join Date: Feb 2005 Posts: 22	Feedback Needed Hi all please look at my site and give me your feedback good or bad i dont mind www.youpies.co.uk many thanks

03-02-2005, 02:02 PM	#3 (permalink)
painperdu NamePros Regular Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: Louisiana, USA Posts: 658	Looks good to me. I agree with poordoggie about the grammar though. __________________ dotbob.com -Cheap Domain Name Registrations/Unlimited Web Hosting Plan $5.98/month

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03-06-2005, 09:53 AM	#7 (permalink)
kw31 NamePros Regular Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: Hong Kong Posts: 973	Nice banner and use of colour The white on the banner where the logo sits looks too big though but neverless it's a great site! __________________ :hi: Move along ... nothing to see here :)

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03-04-2005, 11:24 AM	THREAD STARTER #5 (permalink)
roadsideruk New Member Join Date: Feb 2005 Posts: 22	thanks for the feedback i have tried a background change when rolling over a link what do you all think many thanks youpies

03-04-2005, 12:15 PM	#6 (permalink)
PoorDoggie Soon to be RICHdoggie! Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: UK Posts: 2,408	nice rollover links! You still have grammar problems, you always seem to put a space before the full stop or question mark when it should be after it. EG: You type: "Hello .What is your name ?" Should Be: "Hello. What is your name?" You may want to go through and correct these mistakes

03-06-2005, 11:12 AM	#8 (permalink)
Petter This mute print lies Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: Bergen, Norway Posts: 4,761	It's gray! .. boring colors IMO, not a very good banner and a boring layout!

03-06-2005, 07:51 PM	#9 (permalink)
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03-06-2005, 09:54 PM	#10 (permalink)
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