First go round...had some help...

movingconcierge · 10-10-2005, 02:48 PM

I'll take your constructive criticisms...thank you.

TheMovingConcierge

WereHunter

Voip-Links

leviathon · 10-10-2005, 02:53 PM

They're all:

too simple
too plain
too little pictures.

They're based from free templates, which sort of kills your whole idea. Like the 3rd one. It is a free template on the internet, which means it wouldn't be exactly fit for your purpose. And you need much much more pictures....

Still I like some of the ideas, but you can put a lot more work into your sites and improve them greatly.

Good luck

movingconcierge · 10-10-2005, 03:15 PM

Thanks...dig your icon...

Shorty · 10-10-2005, 03:52 PM

I think all three look quite professional actually, especially the first one and it's colour scheme. (Although I dont agree with the SEO text at the bottom, you really shouldn't do that.)

The last is the worst of them because it seems to have very little to it, if you understand me.

movingconcierge · 10-10-2005, 04:36 PM

Thanks for the accolade...I have so many sites to develop that I am just kindof slapping them up and fixing them as I go...gotta get them indexed.

Why shouldn't I have the text on the bottom? It is all relevent terms to the page...no hidden keywords that are offensive...

**NPQueen** · 10-10-2005, 05:21 PM

Moving Concierge-The purple is a little overwhelming and the red on the page clashes with everything else. The logo imagine you are using looks a little "cheap" compaired to the other imagines ont he site. Nice concept!

Werehunter-It didnt' load for me I tried three times. Sorry

Voip-links-This one didn't load either, server down maybe?

lilgee · 10-10-2005, 06:37 PM

Voip-Links looks the best. The others i dont like em at all.

movingconcierge · 10-10-2005, 06:46 PM

Thanks for the comments. I just tried the red to see what it looked like. I don't like the standard blue and the purple is just bold text.

I get a lot of positive feedback on the purple branding on media print, so I have to keep it throughout. I kindof like it actually...and obviously.

I noticed that the two other sites weren't loading for some of the day. I was pretty busy on the servers, that could be why. Thanks for trying and for the comments...again.

**NPQueen** · 10-10-2005, 07:05 PM

I thought I would try again...

WereHunter-I think this one looks nice, I like the background. There is a large blank gap in the middle of the main page. Have you considered having a couple of different pages for this site instead of everything on the main page?

Voip-Links-I agree with some of the others above. I think this one looks the best of the three.

Best of luck with these projects!

movingconcierge · 10-11-2005, 01:22 AM

I actually do plan on breaking up werehunter and werehunters into multiple pages. I got some other advise to add more text about each book on the page before sending off the visitor to my affiliate.

I also took the advise of the red link haters, so if you all can revisit themovingconcierge.com and give some revised insight it would be genuinely appreciated.

Thanks again for all the help...it's a reciprical world...

LeetPCUser · 10-11-2005, 10:15 AM

Time for critiques:

The Moving Concierge: First off I would center the site. It looks very odd left aligned. Second off, work the Google ad into the design, maybe a footer. Definately don't have it chilling on the right hand side by itself. I also do not care for the JavaScript menu thingy.

Were Hunter: Not bad except the book alignment at the bottom seems off because the main page is only half the size and the books span 100%. I would say center this put a 1px white solid border on it and contain the books in it. Then it could look nice. I especially like the blue with white rollover on the links.
????: NamePros.com http://www.namepros.com/web-design-reviews/130606-first-go-round-had-some-help.html

VOIP: Looks good except it needs to be centered. The links at the bottom are centered on FireFox but are not aligning with the page. Also the Google Ads are overflowing and not lining up. I would also recommend making some pretty pictures or text on the main intro to the site.

If you need help or creative ideas feel free to pm me.

Shorty · 10-11-2005, 01:07 PM

Adding text at the bottom like that is kind of a cheat in my opinion, you should try and add more descriptions to pages to include these words rather than bump them in there like that. Plus it's not nice to make your visitors put up with it either.

movingconcierge · 10-11-2005, 09:10 PM

I had this big nicely worded thank you written and....BOOM...down went my PC...figures...

Anyway thanks for all the comments and criticisms. I will take them all into consideration and implement what I can. Some of the comments I didn't even know about, like the off center this and that...doesn't show on my PC.

Thanks again. When I become a guru, I'll reciprocate.

WebWizard · 10-12-2005, 11:33 AM

This is alot of good advise for ya ^

movingconcierge · 10-17-2005, 03:12 PM

I took a lot of the advice given on this board and put it into my site. Could I get a couple of eyes to give a second look? Thanks.

The Moving Concierge

brianmn · 10-17-2005, 04:44 PM

They are all pretty plain, and simple. And they have some bad color combinations. Purple and black are not very good backgrounds.

EmanEvan · 10-17-2005, 06:04 PM

To be honest, they could all use alittle tweaking. The first one could use a more attractive header font. The second one needs a header. The third is ok so far in my opinion, however its still not finished. All have potential. Good work so far.

Troubled1 · 10-17-2005, 08:45 PM

I like all three of them. The werehunter needs to be broken up into different pages however.

Heres a tip for you. Always check your sites in at least both IE and Firefox as these are the most popular browsers. I usually check mine in IE,Firefox and Opera. Also it's usually a good idea to check them in 800x600 since quite a few people still use it. It's takes a bit of time but it's better then finding out later your site looks like crap in one of them. I'm speaking from experience here

ammo · 10-20-2005, 02:12 PM

Well there not bad, but they need alot of work, try working on your graphics, try and get a copy of photoshop or the such and learning that, it will help you out tremendously.

Momo · 10-21-2005, 06:18 PM

The first one looks okay, but the header needs more work. The second one is the least I like, probably because of the dark theme and it hurts my eyes to read from websites with black backgrounds. The third is okay, although the ads sticks out on the right, so the whole body isn't aligned with the header anymore.

infinitomagazine · 10-22-2005, 01:36 AM

i dont like colours, i think is good ur flash albun, letter size are too big, but ur doing well,change colour and letter size, will better i know

alanpaladka · 10-23-2005, 07:21 AM

http://www.themovingconcierge.com/
This site is simple and beautiful I like the colours. But the navigation bar in the bottom doesn't looks really good.
in http://www.werehunter.com/
I don't like the colours and fonts. Fonts are too big.
http://www.voip-links.com/
The header pic is good. But in body section, it looks plain to me. Try to improve the navigation bar in the bottom also.

eli03 · 10-23-2005, 11:35 AM

the first one was simple, i like it. The second one, good content, i like your navagational menu, need to change your font site on the descriptiton of the book. The third site, need to fix your header, or try use different google ads size. Also try simple flash animation on your header. make it more livelier.

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EmanEvan NamePros Regular Join Date: Jun 2005 Posts: 289	To be honest, they could all use alittle tweaking. The first one could use a more attractive header font. The second one needs a header. The third is ok so far in my opinion, however its still not finished. All have potential. Good work so far. __________________ eFilms.info \| seeing.info - PM offers

10-23-2005, 11:35 AM	#23 (permalink)
eli03 Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: HomeinProvence Posts: 1,562	the first one was simple, i like it. The second one, good content, i like your navagational menu, need to change your font site on the descriptiton of the book. The third site, need to fix your header, or try use different google ads size. Also try simple flash animation on your header. make it more livelier. __________________ Dress Up Doll Games EB Babes Mergene Elibest Directory\|Philippines\|WP THEME: Tnomeralc Web Design Toys

10-10-2005, 02:53 PM	#2 (permalink)
leviathon NamePros Regular Join Date: Sep 2005 Location: Canada Posts: 683	They're all: too simple too plain too little pictures. They're based from free templates, which sort of kills your whole idea. Like the 3rd one. It is a free template on the internet, which means it wouldn't be exactly fit for your purpose. And you need much much more pictures.... Still I like some of the ideas, but you can put a lot more work into your sites and improve them greatly. Good luck

10-10-2005, 03:15 PM	THREAD STARTER #3 (permalink)
movingconcierge Senior Member Join Date: Aug 2005 Posts: 2,266	Thanks...dig your icon...

10-10-2005, 03:52 PM	#4 (permalink)
Shorty Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2005 Location: England Posts: 1,034	I think all three look quite professional actually, especially the first one and it's colour scheme. (Although I dont agree with the SEO text at the bottom, you really shouldn't do that.) The last is the worst of them because it seems to have very little to it, if you understand me.

10-10-2005, 04:36 PM	THREAD STARTER #5 (permalink)
movingconcierge Senior Member Join Date: Aug 2005 Posts: 2,266	Thanks for the accolade...I have so many sites to develop that I am just kindof slapping them up and fixing them as I go...gotta get them indexed. Why shouldn't I have the text on the bottom? It is all relevent terms to the page...no hidden keywords that are offensive...

10-10-2005, 05:21 PM	#6 (permalink)
NPQueen Executive Admin Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: Sin City ;) Posts: 2,862	Moving Concierge-The purple is a little overwhelming and the red on the page clashes with everything else. The logo imagine you are using looks a little "cheap" compaired to the other imagines ont he site. Nice concept! Werehunter-It didnt' load for me I tried three times. Sorry Voip-links-This one didn't load either, server down maybe?

10-10-2005, 06:46 PM	THREAD STARTER #8 (permalink)
movingconcierge Senior Member Join Date: Aug 2005 Posts: 2,266	Thanks for the comments. I just tried the red to see what it looked like. I don't like the standard blue and the purple is just bold text. I get a lot of positive feedback on the purple branding on media print, so I have to keep it throughout. I kindof like it actually...and obviously. I noticed that the two other sites weren't loading for some of the day. I was pretty busy on the servers, that could be why. Thanks for trying and for the comments...again.

10-10-2005, 07:05 PM	#9 (permalink)
NPQueen Executive Admin Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: Sin City ;) Posts: 2,862	I thought I would try again... WereHunter-I think this one looks nice, I like the background. There is a large blank gap in the middle of the main page. Have you considered having a couple of different pages for this site instead of everything on the main page? Voip-Links-I agree with some of the others above. I think this one looks the best of the three. Best of luck with these projects!

10-11-2005, 01:22 AM	THREAD STARTER #10 (permalink)
movingconcierge Senior Member Join Date: Aug 2005 Posts: 2,266	I actually do plan on breaking up werehunter and werehunters into multiple pages. I got some other advise to add more text about each book on the page before sending off the visitor to my affiliate. I also took the advise of the red link haters, so if you all can revisit themovingconcierge.com and give some revised insight it would be genuinely appreciated. Thanks again for all the help...it's a reciprical world...

10-11-2005, 10:15 AM	#11 (permalink)
LeetPCUser Account Suspended Join Date: May 2005 Location: Whitewater, WI Posts: 3,710	Time for critiques: The Moving Concierge: First off I would center the site. It looks very odd left aligned. Second off, work the Google ad into the design, maybe a footer. Definately don't have it chilling on the right hand side by itself. I also do not care for the JavaScript menu thingy. Were Hunter: Not bad except the book alignment at the bottom seems off because the main page is only half the size and the books span 100%. I would say center this put a 1px white solid border on it and contain the books in it. Then it could look nice. I especially like the blue with white rollover on the links. ????: NamePros.com http://www.namepros.com/web-design-reviews/130606-first-go-round-had-some-help.html VOIP: Looks good except it needs to be centered. The links at the bottom are centered on FireFox but are not aligning with the page. Also the Google Ads are overflowing and not lining up. I would also recommend making some pretty pictures or text on the main intro to the site. If you need help or creative ideas feel free to pm me.

10-11-2005, 01:07 PM	#12 (permalink)
Shorty Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2005 Location: England Posts: 1,034	Adding text at the bottom like that is kind of a cheat in my opinion, you should try and add more descriptions to pages to include these words rather than bump them in there like that. Plus it's not nice to make your visitors put up with it either.

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10-11-2005, 09:10 PM	THREAD STARTER #13 (permalink)
movingconcierge Senior Member Join Date: Aug 2005 Posts: 2,266	I had this big nicely worded thank you written and....BOOM...down went my PC...figures... Anyway thanks for all the comments and criticisms. I will take them all into consideration and implement what I can. Some of the comments I didn't even know about, like the off center this and that...doesn't show on my PC. Thanks again. When I become a guru, I'll reciprocate.

10-12-2005, 11:33 AM	#14 (permalink)
WebWizard New Member Join Date: Oct 2005 Posts: 15	This is alot of good advise for ya ^

10-17-2005, 04:44 PM	#16 (permalink)
brianmn NamePros Member Join Date: Oct 2005 Posts: 173	They are all pretty plain, and simple. And they have some bad color combinations. Purple and black are not very good backgrounds.

10-17-2005, 08:45 PM	#18 (permalink)
Troubled1 NamePros Regular Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: Texas Posts: 306	I like all three of them. The werehunter needs to be broken up into different pages however. Heres a tip for you. Always check your sites in at least both IE and Firefox as these are the most popular browsers. I usually check mine in IE,Firefox and Opera. Also it's usually a good idea to check them in 800x600 since quite a few people still use it. It's takes a bit of time but it's better then finding out later your site looks like crap in one of them. I'm speaking from experience here

10-20-2005, 02:12 PM	#19 (permalink)
ammo Senior Member Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: Cornwall! Posts: 2,251	Well there not bad, but they need alot of work, try working on your graphics, try and get a copy of photoshop or the such and learning that, it will help you out tremendously.

10-21-2005, 06:18 PM	#20 (permalink)
Momo Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2005 Posts: 2,299	The first one looks okay, but the header needs more work. The second one is the least I like, probably because of the dark theme and it hurts my eyes to read from websites with black backgrounds. The third is okay, although the ads sticks out on the right, so the whole body isn't aligned with the header anymore.

10-22-2005, 01:36 AM	#21 (permalink)
infinitomagazine Senior Member Join Date: May 2005 Location: peru Posts: 2,571	i dont like colours, i think is good ur flash albun, letter size are too big, but ur doing well,change colour and letter size, will better i know

10-23-2005, 07:21 AM	#22 (permalink)
alanpaladka Account Closed Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: India Posts: 299	http://www.themovingconcierge.com/ This site is simple and beautiful I like the colours. But the navigation bar in the bottom doesn't looks really good. in http://www.werehunter.com/ I don't like the colours and fonts. Fonts are too big. http://www.voip-links.com/ The header pic is good. But in body section, it looks plain to me. Try to improve the navigation bar in the bottom also.

First go round...had some help...

thank you thank you...